英语四级考试作文冲刺点拨（上）
四、六级考试越来越使模板无用武之地，阅卷老师在阅卷的过程中最多的是关注同学们的用词和句型的使用。
高分作文标志
1：四级120-150字；六级150—180字；
2、是否长短句交叉；
3、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；
4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；
下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：
1. 适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we / i (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：it is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2. 善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
如however / therefore /for example/i believe做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
比如说：other individuals, however, take the attitude that…
3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think, people, opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper; approaches代替ways; implement代替carry out; sharpen one's competitive edge代替enhance one's competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
下面举一篇我班上一位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
标题：computer and i
第一段：i never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. that night i was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly替换very
thrilling替换exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替换sb. be interested in sth.
google替换search
an army of替换a lot of
第二段：the dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. it is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
the dawn of the new century witnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；
increasing popularity替换more and more popular
coincident with…非常地道的词汇，表达"与…一致"的意思，替换with…
advancement替换development
pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into
current ( currently )替换now
appeal to sb.替换sb. be interested in sth.
growing individuals替换more and more people
it is no exaggeration to say经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的
第三段：to begin with, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment. little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
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