MyRoommate
It was my first day at the university. Carrying bags of luggage, I walked slowly into the dormitory building. I looked door after door for my name. At last I found it. In the room, there was already a girl making her bed.
Smiling shyly, she greeted me with "how do you do".Then, she continued her work, paying no more attention to me."What a stuck up fellow", I thought. Then I began to examine the room. It was no different from any other room I had seen.But it had been thoroughly cleaned by my new roommate, no doubt.
Minutes later, I started to examine her. She was thin, short and dark. Her hair was in a completely disastrous mess like a bunch of straw. Her dirty clothes and tired look were clearly signs of a long journey. Well, her 2'shirt was too big for her and her trousers were a bit short, which made her look funny.Furthermore, she wore a pair of rubber scandals, which were indeed out of fashion. In a word, she did not look like a smart freshman at all. "A yokel", I concluded.
The second time she spoke, her accent told me that she was from the south. "Shall I help you to get your luggage from the ground floor?" I did not refuse since I really needed help. Wow!She was quick in action. Before I said "Thanks", she had already walked out of the room and was soon far ahead of me.
"A good guy," I said to myself, "I will make friends with her. "I hurried and caught up with her.
简 评
本文作者通过细致的观察和生动的语言，使一个淳朴少女的形象跃然纸上。作者叙述了上大学的第一天对室友的第一印象。有外表的描写：黝黑瘦弱矮小、头发像一团乱草堆、穿着不合身的衣裤和过时的凉鞋。由此，作者得出的结论是她是个“乡巴佬”。有语言的描写："how do you do"，"Shall l help you to get your luggage from theground floor?"，虽然言语不多，但读者能感受到这是一个热心善良的女孩。还有行动的描写：整理完自己的床铺后，帮作者搬行李，表现出她勤劳淳朴的一面。因此，作者最终产生了要和她交朋友的想法。本文字数不多，情节简单，但作者成功地塑造了室友的形象：身材矮小，但有着高大的形象；衣着过时，但有一颗美丽的心灵，与作者相成了强烈的对比。作者对语言的运用自如，有扎实的语言功底。文章读来没有晦涩生硬之感。
(点评教师：黄莺)