MyHighSchoolLife
they say that the high school life is the busiest and nastiest but not for me. i think the school days are the happiest days of my life.
i have studied have for over one and half years. life here is very busy and exciting. there are many kinds of interesting after-school activities, such as sports meeting, science week and art week. they can develop our social skills. by thinking part in these activities, students show their special talents, their ability to lead, and their ability to get on with others. in addition, i have made many new friends who have really helped me on my life. and our teachers are kind to us. they not only educate us, but also encourage us to be a useful part of society.
so i think that although i find high school more difficult, i like my life here.
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they say that the high school life is the busiest and nastiest but not for me. i think the school days are the happiest days of my life.
i have studied have for over one and half years. life here is very busy and exciting. there are many kinds of interesting after-school activities, such as sports meeting, science week and art week. they can develop our social skills. by thinking part in these activities, students show their special talents, their ability to lead, and their ability to get on with others. in addition, i have made many new friends who have really helped me on my life. and our teachers are kind to us. they not only educate us, but also encourage us to be a useful part of society.
so i think that although i find high school more difficult, i like my life here.
批改 1.i have studied have（去掉，多余） for over one and （加a )half years. 2.by thinking(taking 笔下误) part in these 3.who have really helped me on(in) my life. 评语：本篇文章介绍了自己的高中生活，虽然别人觉得很枯燥，但是作者认为非常快乐，文章写的很棒，和原来相比基本上没有汉语思维的干扰。句子词汇的使用比较高级，进步明显，而且几个错误细心的话都可以避免，你进步很大，加油啊