Spring,aGoodTimeforExercising
Spring is coming. Every life revives. Grass turns green in Fudan and everyone seems to be full of energy. A good time for exercising, isn't it? As darkness falls, the gymnasium is open for those who have a strong desire to strengthen their bodies.Soon the gymnasium is full of people, the weak, the strong, the tall and the short.
The first person that comes into my sight is standing in front of the mirror. He is quite muscular. Of course he wants everybody here to see how strong he is, so he is stripped to the waist and poses like a Greek statue, wearing a look of pride on his face. If you feel weary of this self-love fellow, please direct your sight to another person. He lifts a barbell above his knees and keeps this posture for a long time. His face turns red while he keeps shouting to support himself. Others can't help worrying about him for his blood seems to burst out from the vein on his face. At last he puts down the barbell and only then have I come to notice that his T shirt is soaking. From the silhouette of his back, I can see every piece of his muscle. The last person that draws my attention is in the corner. He sits on a chair with two dumbbells in his hands. He keeps lifting them, speechless.After a while, he drops the dumbbells and start to exercise on other body building apparatus without a moment's rest. He is like a machine that never feels tired.
Besides the three people, everyone here makes a deep impression on me. They prefer the dull exercising to playing outside. They win my respect for they are true men.
简 评
本文中，人们以另一种方式迎接春天的来临——进行体育锻炼。作者没有面面俱到地写人们进行了哪些体育活动，而是把目光集中在三个人身上，突出了他们的不同特点。第一个锻炼者有一身发达的肌肉，赤裸着上身摆出各种姿势；第二个锻炼者在举杠铃，脸涨的通红，血管都似乎要厚裂了；第三个锻炼者坐在角落里练习哑铃，然后不知疲倦地到另一个体育器材上进行锻炼。最后，作者对这些经受着枯燥锻炼的人们表达了敬意。本文避免了此类文章常犯的因顾及面面俱到而往往写得不够深刻的通病，通过对三个代表人物细致的刻画，由点及面，描绘了一幅人们热火朝天地艰苦锻炼的场面。
文中有一些细节的描写给文章增色不少，如his blood seems to burst out from the vein on his face,his T-shirt is soaking等，非常生动，表现了作者细致的观察力。
(点评教师：黄莺)